Magic of Three!!! Choose one of these 'revelations' to build up to!!! Remember to:- Use Red Flag Words/Phrases
- Drop a clue/hint
- Include reaction (What did the character do & think/feel)
- 1st clue- dismiss, 2nd clue- start to worry, 3rd clue- REVELATION!!
On my keyboard, stood a tiny alien child, grasping onto a sword like he was holding on for dear life.
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Sitting in the corner, with tears rolling down his cheek, was the rustiest tin-baby I had ever seen. "Don't cry!" I blurted out immediately.
*****Here is mine:
All of the sudden, a high-pitched scream came from the garage. I stopped typing to listen carefully. Not a sound. It's probably just my imagination again.
A moment later, something small, yet quick as a mouse darted right over my toes. I took a deep breath, then slowly leaned over to look underneath the desk. Nothing there. My heart began to race a bit, but I knew I had to get my homework done. Focus!
Without warning, a flash of green darted, then paused before me. I froze in place, as I couldn't believe my eyes. Why me? Is this even possible? On my keyboard, stood a tiny alien child, grasping onto a sword like he was holding on for dear life.
All of a sudden,I heard a strange sound like metal scraping against itself."Eh it most just be my imagination running wild," I thought and shrugged it off.
ReplyDeleteA moment later,I saw a small shiny metal like figure dash into the corner of my garage.A bead of sweat trickled down my cheek,and my heart began to pound. "Calm down!" I told myself. But I was still very frightened.
Without warning,I spotted the creature.It's so tiny and shiny what is it? I peered closely and,sitting in the corner, with tears rolling down his cheek, was the rustiest tin-baby I had ever seen. "Don't cry!" I blurted out immediately.
Suddenly, a squeaky sound like old iron bending came from near the unused, crimson closet. I shrugged and sighed "Aw its probably nothing"
ReplyDeleteBut just then a quick flash of silver shot past me and seemed to zip into the dresser. Now sweating, I stood up and headed for the closet.
The aroma of worn-out steel drifted past my nose. I jumped back, too stunned to speak. Sitting in the corner, with teal tears streaming down its cheek, was the rustiest tin-baby I had ever seen. Not that I had ever seen one before.I mean its not every day you see a metal child in your dresser. " Don't cry " was the only thing I could think of saying, for I couldn't bear to just stand there, allowing it to rust to its death.
Suddenly, a rush of neon green blur sprinted across my keyboard as i finished my writing paper. Must of been the light playing with my eyes i'll just have to tell my mom i'm gonna need glasses. Just then, a small squeak came from behind the computer. I froze wide eyed, to scared to look, but once i did nothing was there. Now i was ready for anything. I felt my head it was sweating like crazy! Then Without warning, a small creature jumped onto my arm. It was covered in olive green scales! It was holding onto a golden sword embroidered with rubys. The tiny creature screamed with anger as it held up the small sword as if it was the only important thing in its life. It jabbed the sword into my flesh. I gasped as i noticed my blood coming out of my wrist.
ReplyDeleteI love this, Emma! Sooooo much better than mine!!
ReplyDeleteJust as I was finishing my algebra homework on the computer, I saw a tiny flash of green seem to dance across my keyboard. I shrugged it off. Just then, I heard a small voice call out "surrender!!" I whirled around in my chair but saw nothing. Without warning, a baby alien jumped off my keyboard and planted his glistening, bronze sword in the middle of my hand. I was surprised to see blood trickle out.
ReplyDeleteSuddenly, a flash of neon jade bolted in front of my jet black pupils. I took a deep breath and decided that the electrician needed to pay a visit. But just then a faint mumbling sound came from the back of the computer. By now I was beginning to sweat.I got up , and peered behind the technical device. But without warning, a wailing voice yelped "please do not eat me, for I am only an alien baby from the planet Zara." Too stunned to speak, I continued to listen. "I was sent to your planet to capture 2 ounces of heumann blood " I couldn't help but giggle when he fumbled on the word human. But my smile faded when he (I'm pretty sure he was a he)pointed to a celestial bronze sword that he held in his hand. Should I let him slice me? He reassured my choice to pick to let him chop me when he said "If I don't get the blood from you and bring it back in the next 4 millinea" (I guess that meant days) I waited until he continued " Our master, lord Kronos will cut off my head!" I knew what I had to do. I told him my answer and the next thing I knew there was a gash in my right arm. I looked around for the alien, but he was gone.
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